Good Timings

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meenas17
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Good Timings

#1 Post by meenas17 » 15 Jan 2021, 18:00

Governed by by auspicious time
Rahukalam, Yemakandam
Kuligai,Horai, followed by yogams
Amirtha yogam, Siddhayogam,
Maranayogam.

Not to leave off the new moon day,
Amavasai,, full moon day, Paurnami,,
Ashtami, the eight day after new moon
or Full moon, Navami, the ninth after the two
moon days.

Limiting our activities to these
we conduct life, plan our travel,
fix wedding dates. the naming
of the new born, entering
the new house.

Too many, too bothersome
having followed so long
one cannot disregard the traditional
beliefs. Fear surges, if we
attempt to bypass them.

I follow these timings
as disciplined as ever.
Going by the traditions
which the forefathers have set
majority fall in line.
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BobBradshaw
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Re: Good Timings

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 15 Jan 2021, 22:32

Nice one, Meenas. One nit: why is "Majority" capitalized? Did you mean to put a period after "set"? Or maybe you should tweak the last line to read "the majority fall in line."? It's an enjoyable poem...it has a nice flow to it.

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Billy
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Re: Good Timings

#3 Post by Billy » 16 Jan 2021, 00:15

The poem is interesting, but mainly because I have another culture to read about. Otherwise the poem just feels informational. I want some kind of tension or imagery or metaphor or narrative that doesn’t answer everything for me but gives me something to draw my own conclusions.

I’ve been writing seriously for around 14 years and I’m just beginning to get it. But it all depends on what you want to do as a poet. Maybe you are happy with your poetry as is and that's fine.

meenas17
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Re: Good Timings

#4 Post by meenas17 » 17 Jan 2021, 14:35

Thanks, Bob.
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Re: Good Timings

#5 Post by meenas17 » 17 Jan 2021, 14:36

Yes, I agree with you Billy.
it is information with few titbits of fear surging while attempting to perform during those prescribed hours.
meenas17

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