The Input And Output

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meenas17
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The Input And Output

#1 Post by meenas17 » 21 Feb 2021, 21:15

It is as though
I am passing through
a storm.

I feel being ambushed
the winds and rains
confine me .

An experience I have
never undergone,
a bit crucial.

The heart pounds
as the rains rage
with a vengeance.

The shiver down
the adrenaline
knocks me down

like the hurricane
dashing on the
window panes.

I sense an exasperation,
a throw out, a deceit
somewhere behind,

encompasses, places
me in a situ, a dilemma,
The winds blow unabated,

hard to regain composure
I watch the external fury in fear
while the internal tears me apart.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: The Input And Output

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 21 Feb 2021, 21:58

Good metaphor. I like how you bring the outside in, as gardeners like to say. Well done

meenas17
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Re: The Input And Output

#3 Post by meenas17 » 23 Feb 2021, 18:18

Thanks, bob.
meenas17

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