All Happen In A Day

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meenas17
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All Happen In A Day

#1 Post by meenas17 » 30 Jun 2021, 21:16

The rains come
with a momentum
a heavy downpour
inundating high and low.

The sun rises
shines with a brilliance
scorching the places
plains and hills.

The storm blows
in high velocity
bringing roofs down
a collapse unthinkable.

Flooding dries up
Heat subdues,
Wind abates.
All happen in a day.
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FranktheFrank
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Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Re: All Happen In A Day

#2 Post by FranktheFrank » 04 Jul 2021, 23:51

I get the gist of this poem Meena

BobBradshaw
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Re: All Happen In A Day

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 05 Jul 2021, 00:11

Good suggestion, Frank

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