Rolling Stone

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CalebMurdock
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Rolling Stone

#1 Post by CalebMurdock » 17 Dec 2023, 13:12

Rolling Stone

BobBradshaw
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Re: Rolling Stone

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 17 Dec 2023, 22:22

Good poem…. Not sure why the title is Rolling Stone….

Michael (MV)
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Re: Rolling Stone

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 18 Dec 2023, 01:32

Welcome to the Block, Caleb!

Workshop illustrated suggestions for your perusal & consideration:

Found between the covers of the ROLLING STONE:

You’re not sexist
if you allow your women
to remove their burkas
while having sex.

Or maybe this more edgy is called for:

You’re not sexist
if you allow your women
to remove their burkas
while screwing them.


In the spirit of creativity,

Michael (MV)


CalebMurdock wrote:
17 Dec 2023, 13:12
Rolling Stone

You’re not sexist if you
allow your women to remove
their burkas during sex.



The title refers to the magazine. I wrote it in response to Jann Wenner, the founder of the magazine, who said a lot of sexist things in an interview not too long ago.

I write a lot of short poems.

CalebMurdock
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Re: Rolling Stone

#4 Post by CalebMurdock » 18 Dec 2023, 01:53

Thank you, Bob and Michael.

I named the poem Rolling Stone (perhaps I should add "Magazine") because there was lots of sexism in the magazine itself for decades. Having heard the sexist meanderings of the founder, that just confirms what everyone already felt.

Thank you for your thoughts, Michael. I'll consider them.

I'm not sure that adding a vulgar word helps the poem any, but I'll think about it.

I posted this short poem after the longer poems because I think I'm posting poems too fast, and I thought a really short one (almost a haiku) would be less taxing on the other members. I'm so pleased to have found another forum to participate on.

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