"triad"

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Michael (MV)
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"triad"

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 01 Sep 2012, 05:42

genuine art
still life alive
like a guilt free muffin top





                        sunlight doesn't fall / manna / spreads / on stain'd glass / like good news
like the hum of the hive wakes the bear -- Honey





I use
up all my rhymes

it's time to return to

shooting the 5 marbles of my
boyhood

SivaRamanathan
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Joined: 14 May 2011, 20:30

Re: "triad"

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 02 Sep 2012, 07:27

Michael
I like this version better than the previous one. I think you are experimenting with new styles.Beyond that I am not able to suggest any
variations.

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