"fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

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Michael (MV)
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"fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 21 Feb 2013, 19:52

 
You are Heathcliff
I am Heathcliff
both able




                        and we are off
                             beat and our heart beats

                                              like a nomad-bastard racing bareback on horseback our undivided days





Estranged

regardless

I am with you
all ways


as we ride on unsaddled
in the same stable kept

surviving from and free of
killer instinct
 

 
 
 
 

Chris
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Re: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

#2 Post by Chris » 22 Feb 2013, 15:34

Consider for your work shop:

there's no such word as "broem" in Afrikaans. The correct word is "besem", defined in English as:
a cleaning implement for sweeping; bundle of straws or twigs attached to a long (very long) handle.


In the interests of creativity

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=826HMLoiE_o

Michael (MV)
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Re: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 25 Feb 2013, 12:41

About this poem: a broem

brother(hood) + poem = Broem

Broetry

A free-formed broem influenced by Brontë

the sister who created the man


Bronte + poem + brother

8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 

 
 
 

mrrecord
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Re: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

#4 Post by mrrecord » 28 Feb 2013, 22:45

Broetic license.

Michael (MV)
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Re: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

#5 Post by Michael (MV) » 02 Mar 2013, 00:14

mrrecord,

Thanks for finding & sharing

"Broetic license"

^^ Yes, strong, brave, free

8)

Michael (MV)

Then she ask me
be my savior
brother, brother of the moon

mrrecord wrote:Broetic license.

 
 
 
 

FrankDyer
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Re: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

#6 Post by FrankDyer » 11 Mar 2013, 01:54

Mike, you are a rascal. At least you stick to your chosen form, so brief and now you invent words. If only we apprecaited your work more.

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