started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

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Michael (MV)
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started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 20 May 2013, 04:06

"the holy hounding / on the arena green"

my youth is not lost Atlantis
not bone-buried this is how I grieve
full-bodied to heighten and even
overwhelm the overcome

the flesh still sensates and resonates
endowment from the soul for life passion marks
remove the thorn - healed by a purple heart of gold
lionization with halo in tow   (a mane that grows thin-resistant)

rock 'n hardy's rollin 'n shape
by wrestling to lose never
the sistine visions from vital signs
that point to like a sword parting sea
an extended detour to withdrawal
from the robust of concert-going days

SivaRamanathan
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Re: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 20 May 2013, 06:07

Michael
I have read this so many times.It sounds pristine.I have nothing more intelligent to say.

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Re: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

#3 Post by Billy » 21 May 2013, 04:57

Well, Michael, this read exquisitely, and as Siva says, pristine. The only thing I'm sure about is lost youth regained in the "endowment from the soul". Good stuff here to ponder and one is willing to ponder b/c of the interesting language.

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Re: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

#4 Post by IapCharon » 14 Jul 2013, 03:35

Dear Michael (MV)...please consider:

"the holy hounding / on the arena green" {another title}

[m](M)y youth is not lost Atlantis (-)
[not bone-buried] this is how I grieve(:)
[full-bodied to heighten and even
overwhelm the overcome

the flesh still sensates and resonates
endowment from the soul for life passion marks
remove the thorn - healed by a purple heart of gold
lionization with halo in tow (a mane that grows thin-resistant)

rock 'n hardy's rollin 'n shape]
by wrestling to (never) lose [never]
the sistine visions from [vital signs
that point to like a sword parting sea
an extended detour to withdrawal
from] the [robust of] concert-going days(.)

My best. IC

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Re: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

#5 Post by FrankDyer » 12 Aug 2013, 01:28

At last a proper poem from Michael (MV) something to get our teeth into, something to savour perhaps! Its deep as Michael is deep and will make us work I am sure.

my youth is not lost Atlantis
not bone-buried this is how I grieve
full-bodied to heighten and even
overwhelm the overcome

the flesh still sensates and resonates
endowment from the soul for life passion marks
remove the thorn - healed by a purple heart of gold
lionization with halo in tow   (a mane that grows thin-resistant)

rock 'n hardy's rollin 'n shape
by wrestling to lose never
the sistine visions from vital signs
that point to like a sword parting sea
an extended detour to withdrawal
from the robust of concert-going days

I failed to find anything to say. Sorry.

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