First Day

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dyerfrank
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First Day

#1 Post by dyerfrank » 27 Mar 2014, 01:06

He moved swiftly
among the machines
feeding the fires
His infectious laugh
resounding
up in the roof stays

meenas17
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Re: First Day

#2 Post by meenas17 » 30 Mar 2014, 21:33

Too short.
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