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by SivakamiVelliangiri
11 Nov 2022, 22:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: White
Replies: 2
Views: 2764

Re: White

Yes.Bold last lines.

S
by SivakamiVelliangiri
10 Nov 2022, 17:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: No Papier Mache Doll, This
Replies: 7
Views: 3951

Re: No Papier Mache Doll, This

Thank you Frank and Kenneth.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
09 Nov 2022, 19:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Golden Lotuses
Replies: 5
Views: 3585

Re: Golden Lotuses

I did read this a couple of times. The last stanza says it all.
I second the nom.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
09 Nov 2022, 19:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Babushka
Replies: 6
Views: 4003

Re: Babushka

Yes, It has potential.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
09 Nov 2022, 19:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: No Papier Mache Doll, This
Replies: 7
Views: 3951

Re: No Papier Mache Doll, This

I have used Meena's words in the poem.Is that permitted?
by SivakamiVelliangiri
07 Nov 2022, 22:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Will
Replies: 3
Views: 2307

Re: Will

I see a nice play of verbs, here.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
07 Nov 2022, 22:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: No Papier Mache Doll, This
Replies: 7
Views: 3951

No Papier Mache Doll, This

Meena Kandaswamy, when she was just twenty badmouthed Gandhi who got us ‘Freedom’- I hid my embarrassment, but bounced as quickly back to the Muses and poetry. Meena Kandaswamy’s goddesses kill, strip, bay for blood, climb on to a stranger’s lap brave bombs, belittle kings, take on the sun. They do ...
by SivakamiVelliangiri
20 Aug 2022, 20:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Without Rhyme or Reason
Replies: 5
Views: 3815

Re: Without Rhyme or Reason

Frank
Thank you for spending time on the poem. I will take some of your suggestions.
Bob
I will attempt writing out like how you suggest. Thanks
Siva
by SivakamiVelliangiri
17 Aug 2022, 21:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Without Rhyme or Reason
Replies: 5
Views: 3815

Without Rhyme or Reason

Michael Thank you. Hi All I have problem with the penultimate line. Can someone suggest any edits? S V3 I needed to know if there were cicadas at Avalanche. On the other side of the valley, giant rhododendrons bloomed. Already my son was making a ruckus, asking that we leave. Where else in South Ind...
by SivakamiVelliangiri
09 Jun 2022, 11:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Li Po, Adrift
Replies: 6
Views: 4323

Re: Li Po, Adrift

I can only comment on the format. Couplets, followed by a single line and finally a three liner.
To me the poem sounded whimsical.

S
by SivakamiVelliangiri
02 May 2022, 21:23
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Poems that placed in the February IBPC 2022: Congrats, Siva, and Billy
Replies: 5
Views: 5355

Re: Poems that placed in the February IBPC 2022: Congrats, Siva, and Billy


Congrats to Chistine Potter for your First Place winning poem.'
Congrats to Billy.
Thanks first to Michael for his editing and having faith in my poem.
Thanks to Frank, Ken and Bob.
Siva Ramanathan
by SivakamiVelliangiri
01 Apr 2022, 21:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wolf Moon
Replies: 10
Views: 6619

Re: Wolf Moon

Thanks for this workshopping Michael.Very instructive.

S
by SivakamiVelliangiri
01 Apr 2022, 21:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Thalankuppam
Replies: 4
Views: 4357

Thalankuppam

Another Madras Day,2008 This is confluence. Call it daughters who meet the mother. Rivers thirst for the salt of the sea. Great poetry happens when rivers meet their legacy. She was always sane, kept her distance. One day she burst forth hungry for human corpse. I went much later to the sea at Ennor...
by SivakamiVelliangiri
30 Mar 2022, 20:33
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Replies: 8
Views: 7440

Re: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.

Bob

It is indeed huge.Thank you, and once again I thank this group.

Siva
by SivakamiVelliangiri
22 Mar 2022, 20:12
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Replies: 8
Views: 7440

Re: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.

Michael and Kenneth I am one of those forgotten poets.But Nature has a way of repaying those who stand and wait. I am happy,yes, but that is all. There is a lot going on about poets who have not been included, and I am amused. What I wrote mattered at some point in the history of Indian Poetry in In...
by SivakamiVelliangiri
21 Mar 2022, 16:49
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Replies: 8
Views: 7440

Re: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.

Thank you,Frank.How much time and effort you would have put in,correcting my grammar and spelling.You let me stay here,even though I or rather my writing was sporadic.
Much appreciated.
Siva
by SivakamiVelliangiri
20 Mar 2022, 20:28
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Replies: 8
Views: 7440

I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.

Dear Friends, I am delighted to be included in the prestigious Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets, anthologized by Jeet Thayil and published by Penguin. Releasing 18th April. You can pre-order the book now. Sivakami Velliangiri I thank my friends at the Writers' Block, who have patiently mentored me ...
by SivakamiVelliangiri
02 Mar 2022, 21:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: II Resemble A Mafia
Replies: 3
Views: 4044

Re: II Resemble A Mafia

The last stanza alone makes a poem by itself. You don’ t need the rest.

S
by SivakamiVelliangiri
23 Feb 2022, 14:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Fellowship of Cats
Replies: 7
Views: 6052

Re: A Fellowship of Cats

Ken

These lines stand out.

the smallness
of their breath against the sensitivity
of my upper lip,

the placement of a curious paw
perhaps a probe, perhaps a gesture
of comfort.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
19 Feb 2022, 10:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Companion
Replies: 8
Views: 6786

Re: The Companion

Thanks Frank.
Siva
by SivakamiVelliangiri
16 Feb 2022, 10:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Died Last Fall
Replies: 7
Views: 5840

Re: Died Last Fall

Frank
A nom
from me too.It is more than cinematic, what you can do with words and holding back.

Siva
by SivakamiVelliangiri
10 Feb 2022, 10:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Companion
Replies: 8
Views: 6786

Re: The Companion

A question mark for the last line is mandatory.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
09 Feb 2022, 10:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Companion
Replies: 8
Views: 6786

Re: The Companion

I like how you can make a poem of something so common, yet towards the end the poetry stands out in your specifications. I am not too sure, but maybe you can add a question mark in a couple of places. You decide.
by SivakamiVelliangiri
08 Feb 2022, 10:52
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2022:
Replies: 15
Views: 12129

Re: Upcoming February IBPC 2022:

Yes Billy, Michael has not responded. Is it appropriate to send a personal message?

S
by SivakamiVelliangiri
06 Feb 2022, 21:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mom's Other Man
Replies: 6
Views: 5969

Re: Mom's Other Man

I echo Bob’ s words.
S