Yes.Bold last lines.
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- 11 Nov 2022, 22:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: White
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2764
- 10 Nov 2022, 17:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: No Papier Mache Doll, This
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3951
Re: No Papier Mache Doll, This
Thank you Frank and Kenneth.
- 09 Nov 2022, 19:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Golden Lotuses
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3585
Re: Golden Lotuses
I did read this a couple of times. The last stanza says it all.
I second the nom.
I second the nom.
- 09 Nov 2022, 19:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Babushka
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4003
Re: Babushka
Yes, It has potential.
- 09 Nov 2022, 19:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: No Papier Mache Doll, This
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3951
Re: No Papier Mache Doll, This
I have used Meena's words in the poem.Is that permitted?
- 07 Nov 2022, 22:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Will
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2307
Re: Will
I see a nice play of verbs, here.
- 07 Nov 2022, 22:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: No Papier Mache Doll, This
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3951
No Papier Mache Doll, This
Meena Kandaswamy, when she was just twenty badmouthed Gandhi who got us ‘Freedom’- I hid my embarrassment, but bounced as quickly back to the Muses and poetry. Meena Kandaswamy’s goddesses kill, strip, bay for blood, climb on to a stranger’s lap brave bombs, belittle kings, take on the sun. They do ...
- 20 Aug 2022, 20:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Without Rhyme or Reason
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3815
Re: Without Rhyme or Reason
Frank
Thank you for spending time on the poem. I will take some of your suggestions.
Bob
I will attempt writing out like how you suggest. Thanks
Siva
Thank you for spending time on the poem. I will take some of your suggestions.
Bob
I will attempt writing out like how you suggest. Thanks
Siva
- 17 Aug 2022, 21:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Without Rhyme or Reason
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3815
Without Rhyme or Reason
Michael Thank you. Hi All I have problem with the penultimate line. Can someone suggest any edits? S V3 I needed to know if there were cicadas at Avalanche. On the other side of the valley, giant rhododendrons bloomed. Already my son was making a ruckus, asking that we leave. Where else in South Ind...
- 09 Jun 2022, 11:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Li Po, Adrift
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4323
Re: Li Po, Adrift
I can only comment on the format. Couplets, followed by a single line and finally a three liner.
To me the poem sounded whimsical.
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To me the poem sounded whimsical.
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- 02 May 2022, 21:23
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Poems that placed in the February IBPC 2022: Congrats, Siva, and Billy
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5355
Re: Poems that placed in the February IBPC 2022: Congrats, Siva, and Billy
Congrats to Chistine Potter for your First Place winning poem.'
Congrats to Billy.
Thanks first to Michael for his editing and having faith in my poem.
Thanks to Frank, Ken and Bob.
Siva Ramanathan
- 01 Apr 2022, 21:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wolf Moon
- Replies: 10
- Views: 6619
Re: Wolf Moon
Thanks for this workshopping Michael.Very instructive.
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- 01 Apr 2022, 21:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Thalankuppam
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4357
Thalankuppam
Another Madras Day,2008 This is confluence. Call it daughters who meet the mother. Rivers thirst for the salt of the sea. Great poetry happens when rivers meet their legacy. She was always sane, kept her distance. One day she burst forth hungry for human corpse. I went much later to the sea at Ennor...
- 30 Mar 2022, 20:33
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7440
Re: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Bob
It is indeed huge.Thank you, and once again I thank this group.
Siva
It is indeed huge.Thank you, and once again I thank this group.
Siva
- 22 Mar 2022, 20:12
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7440
Re: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Michael and Kenneth I am one of those forgotten poets.But Nature has a way of repaying those who stand and wait. I am happy,yes, but that is all. There is a lot going on about poets who have not been included, and I am amused. What I wrote mattered at some point in the history of Indian Poetry in In...
- 21 Mar 2022, 16:49
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7440
Re: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Thank you,Frank.How much time and effort you would have put in,correcting my grammar and spelling.You let me stay here,even though I or rather my writing was sporadic.
Much appreciated.
Siva
Much appreciated.
Siva
- 20 Mar 2022, 20:28
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7440
I am included in the Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets.
Dear Friends, I am delighted to be included in the prestigious Penguin Anthology of Indian Poets, anthologized by Jeet Thayil and published by Penguin. Releasing 18th April. You can pre-order the book now. Sivakami Velliangiri I thank my friends at the Writers' Block, who have patiently mentored me ...
- 02 Mar 2022, 21:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: II Resemble A Mafia
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4044
Re: II Resemble A Mafia
The last stanza alone makes a poem by itself. You don’ t need the rest.
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- 23 Feb 2022, 14:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Fellowship of Cats
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6052
Re: A Fellowship of Cats
Ken
These lines stand out.
the smallness
of their breath against the sensitivity
of my upper lip,
the placement of a curious paw
perhaps a probe, perhaps a gesture
of comfort.
These lines stand out.
the smallness
of their breath against the sensitivity
of my upper lip,
the placement of a curious paw
perhaps a probe, perhaps a gesture
of comfort.
- 19 Feb 2022, 10:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Companion
- Replies: 8
- Views: 6786
Re: The Companion
Thanks Frank.
Siva
Siva
- 16 Feb 2022, 10:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Died Last Fall
- Replies: 7
- Views: 5840
Re: Died Last Fall
Frank
A nom
from me too.It is more than cinematic, what you can do with words and holding back.
Siva
A nom
from me too.It is more than cinematic, what you can do with words and holding back.
Siva
- 10 Feb 2022, 10:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Companion
- Replies: 8
- Views: 6786
Re: The Companion
A question mark for the last line is mandatory.
- 09 Feb 2022, 10:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Companion
- Replies: 8
- Views: 6786
Re: The Companion
I like how you can make a poem of something so common, yet towards the end the poetry stands out in your specifications. I am not too sure, but maybe you can add a question mark in a couple of places. You decide.
- 08 Feb 2022, 10:52
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2022:
- Replies: 15
- Views: 12129
Re: Upcoming February IBPC 2022:
Yes Billy, Michael has not responded. Is it appropriate to send a personal message?
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- 06 Feb 2022, 21:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Mom's Other Man
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5969
Re: Mom's Other Man
I echo Bob’ s words.
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