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- 24 Sep 2018, 21:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15608
Re: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
Simplified....let me know...best, Bob
- 24 Sep 2018, 02:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15608
Re: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised
Thx, Ken... I will simplify it
- 23 Sep 2018, 22:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15608
Re: Bobo The Chimp Types
Revised significantly...pls let me know what you think
- 22 Sep 2018, 23:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Can You Forgive Me
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9494
Re: Can You Forgive Me
Tweaked
- 20 Sep 2018, 10:12
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15608
Re: Bobo The Chimp Types
Lol... love the idea of the chimp screaming when he hears the typewriter’s bell
- 18 Sep 2018, 19:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Under Other Stars
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7205
Re: Under Other Stars
Wonderful poem....I love the close: "get in".
- 17 Sep 2018, 20:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Can You Forgive Me
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9494
Can You Forgive Me
v2: Can You Forgive Me Were your heart an airport, mine would be a plane --its engine in flames, the reckless pilot pleading with the tower for permission to land. v1: Can You Forgive Me If your heart was an airport, mine would be a plane --its engine in flames, the reckless pilot pleading with the ...
- 17 Sep 2018, 20:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Camille - Asile de Montevergues (1914)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10539
Re: Camille - Asile de Montevergues (1914)
Break this poem up into stanzas....the first stopping at the word "disappointment". I think it will be easier to find places that could use a little revision....a good foundation has been set for a darn good poem.
- 16 Sep 2018, 07:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15608
Bobo The Chimp Types - revised (2)
v3: Bobo The Chimp Types Bobo types in his smoking jacket. Every few minutes he pauses, as if critiquing his words-- grunts approvingly. He drags his knuckles across the keyboard, screams when the margin bell rings— leaps atop the typewriter waving his arms furiously as if waving a stick at an appro...
- 14 Sep 2018, 23:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Penguins
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9040
Re: Penguins
Thx, Frank...let me think about the sedentary line....
- 12 Sep 2018, 21:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18434
Re: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
Ah, I have a cousin who lives there....lives near Asheville....do you need to evacuate? I lived through one hurricane as a kid...power was out for over a week...winds so strong the rain passed through our walls...roofs sliding forward like tipped hats...shingles flying off like startled birds....nei...
- 12 Sep 2018, 20:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Penguins
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9040
Re: Penguins
Thanks, Ken...for your warm response
- 12 Sep 2018, 20:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18434
Re: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
Where do you live?
- 11 Sep 2018, 20:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Penguins
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9040
Re: Penguins
v2: Penguins For years they trooped to the ice's edge and stood and looked out to sea. Elderly and sluggish they plopped in the water for a brief dip and climbed back out immediately. There hadn't been the whistling of hungry chicks from burrows in years, but last month young penguins, loaned to us ...
- 11 Sep 2018, 20:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Penguins
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9040
Penguins
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- 11 Sep 2018, 20:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18434
Re: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
This strong, defiant woman who faces sexual assault is a memorable one....I would like to see her in more poems, just as I would like to see more Cuban poems....
- 11 Sep 2018, 20:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Welsh Cakes at War
- Replies: 9
- Views: 16418
Re: Welsh Cakes at War
Good one, Frank...I like how I'm surprised by the turn of events...good imagery, especially of the father and the smells....my only suggestion...take out one or two of the darkness, black, death words....one or two too many good writing, esp. here: Dad returning from work, smell of motor bike, petro...
- 07 Sep 2018, 21:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to Ties
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11532
Re: Ode to Ties
tweaked
- 07 Sep 2018, 21:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: It's a Wrap not Just a Tie
- Replies: 3
- Views: 8269
Re: It's a Wrap not Just a Tie
Clever...enjoyed
- 06 Sep 2018, 06:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to Ties
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11532
Re: Ode to Ties
Thanks, Michael...I like your suggestions...I'll fold them in when I have some time...Bob
- 06 Sep 2018, 06:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7463
Re: a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
I like this, especially these lines:
I can't recall the last time I worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
then the Savior illuminated this apprentice-prince
with the Houdini slip
my life unknotted
then I became also creatively endowed
I can't recall the last time I worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
then the Savior illuminated this apprentice-prince
with the Houdini slip
my life unknotted
then I became also creatively endowed
- 05 Sep 2018, 20:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18434
Re: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
ok, it makes sense now....good one
- 05 Sep 2018, 10:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to Ties
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11532
Re: Ode to Ties
Thanks, guys...I have tweaked the lines you referred to....
- 05 Sep 2018, 09:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18434
Re: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
I like the narrator's strong voice...no wilting flower here...but I don't get the bee stings reference....I'm probably just not aware...
- 04 Sep 2018, 21:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to Ties
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11532
Ode to Ties
Ode to Ties On days like this teenage boys often give us the finger. Why? Because we drive slowly? Or because we boast about our past as if it were the only casino in Atlantic City? For us respect doesn't come from jeering at the old, from smoking the biggest toke or from drinking alcohol that could...