Shah of Iran

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Kenneth2816
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Shah of Iran

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 22 Nov 2022, 00:08

In the shadow of Mount Damavand
a phalanx of Cedars needle back

those who push a little to get
a clear view of downtown Teheran.

In 1936 the Shah wanted moderation
for his country, thought its religious

practices a bar against modernity.
Beginning with Kashf-e hijab which

outlawed wearing the veil, he moved
the secret police to bazaars to

forcefully rip the face coverings off.
Many women committed suicide.

Lipstick was a human right and skirts,
a little eye-liner, education.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Shah of Iran

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 23 Nov 2022, 01:56

Interesting history

Kenneth2816
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Re: Shah of Iran

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 23 Nov 2022, 02:04

Thanks Bob

Michael (MV)
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Re: Shah of Iran

#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 04 Dec 2022, 00:24

 
Hi Ken,

Makes a strong statement without making a statement - that's strong poetry.


Some grammaticals, and etc. incorporated:

In the shadow of Mount Damavand
a phalanx of Cedars needles back

those who push a little to get
a clear view of downtown Teheran.

In 1936, Reza Shah wanted moderation
for his country; thought its religious

practices a bar against modernity.
Beginning with Kashf-e hijab, which

outlawed wearing the veil, he moved
the secret police to bazaars to forcefully

rip the face coverings off.
Many women committed suicide.   (consider: Many women took their lives.)

Lipstick was a human right; and skirts,
a little eye-liner, education.


Michael (MV)



Kenneth2816 wrote:
22 Nov 2022, 00:08

In the shadow of Mount Damavand
a phalanx of Cedars needle back

those who push a little to get
a clear view of downtown Teheran.

In 1936 the Shah wanted moderation
for his country, thought its religious

practices a bar against modernity.
Beginning with Kashf-e hijab which

outlawed wearing the veil, he moved
the secret police to bazaars to

forcefully rip the face coverings off.
Many women committed suicide.

Lipstick was a human right and skirts,
a little eye-liner, education.
 

 

 

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