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Billy
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#1 Post by Billy » 25 Apr 2021, 21:18

down here

i let go
came to
for a short time

a fire inside
the pain returns
silence flees

robbers
are everywhere
masked

and all eyes
like clouds
passing

BobBradshaw
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#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 Apr 2021, 00:17

Good close... “all eyes like clouds passing”

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