Listening To Silence

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meenas17
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Listening To Silence

#1 Post by meenas17 » 13 May 2021, 18:24

Silence is noise,
sweet and pleasing.
one of awe,
one that inspires.

Silence is an exposition
of impressions, live
and bygones. Gold like

The trees and flowers
expressions of fecundity
and beauty, display
eloquence.

The buildings tall
and small deliver
the sighs and cries
with subtle reference.

Places of worship,
command a sanctity
telecast the aura
of divinity.

These turn prosaic
in their placements
when noise permeates
extensively.

They imbibe a poetic glow
when quietness enfolds.
turning into a transparent
and translucent stillness.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: Listening To Silence

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 14 May 2021, 22:41

I would like every "telling" stanza to be an image instead. Try doing it as an exercise. You have a lot to say in your poems. Images would bolster them.

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