Jesus Peed

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Kenneth2816
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Jesus Peed

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 26 May 2021, 15:54

...gnawed at a hang nail
bit his lip at a stubbed toe
scratched his arse absently.

Like other men, he dreamed
a simpler life, maybe a new boat,
weekends at the shore.

He took a lot of pride
in his work, the village carpenter,
and no one said his rate was unfair.

And if he desired a better station,
nicer things, a bit of prestige,
he never said.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Jesus Peed

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 27 May 2021, 02:53

LOVE this characterization of Jesus as Everyman. Just wanted a bit of prestige! Priceless

Kenneth2816
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Re: Jesus Peed

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 30 May 2021, 01:32

Thanks Bob. There are always those eager to take offense at a poem like this because they pride themselves on piety

Michael (MV)
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Re: Jesus Peed

#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 30 May 2021, 09:59

Hi Kenneth,

I like representations of the Messiah as carnate.

I believe the prodigal son parable is
autobiographical.

And his first encounter Resurrection Sunrise was with Mary Magalene - no coincidence - and very romantique


😎

Michael (MV)

Kenneth2816
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Re: Jesus Peed

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 30 May 2021, 21:44

Thanks

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