no matter where i go there i am

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Billy
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no matter where i go there i am

#1 Post by Billy » 05 Jul 2021, 01:01

no matter where i go there i am

someone or many someones
at various locations
always somewhere near my location
whether Arizona, Hawaii,
Wyoming, the Netherlands, Iowa
even Morroco
have been impersonating me

a Muslim guy said
i looked exactly like a British tourist
who visited the riad every winter
wouldn't let it go
you sure your name's not Reginald?
you're pulling Muhammad's nose

the other day a maintenance man
asked to take my picture
he pulled his iPhone out
took several shots
even a selfie of us
you're the spitting image
of my Uncle Sherman
my brother-in-law and sister
ain't gonna believe it

it's rather disconcerting
that there are so many people
who supposedly are my double
i've always relished the thought
that i'm unique
the mold was broken
but it appears some copies
were surreptitiously kept
either i'm counterfeit
or they are

geez God no two snowflakes alike
but several copies of me
running around the world

the worst is that it's always
some nobody uncle or cousin
why can't they say, you look like
Errol Flynn or better yet a young
Ezra, Rupert, or debonair Ted
not my favorite poets but at least poets

an eerier thought is that they're clones
am i the original or the clone
oh my god do clones have souls?
are these poems another's creation
etched in their DNA
lived out again and again
i figured i had a muse
but not Tom Dick and Harry

who's writing this?
Sherman, Reginald, the unnumbered
(unless they're clones and have
serial and model numbers)
doppelgangers out there
parading around in my body
making everyone believe
i'm somebody else

if there are so many of these guys
why haven't i ever met one?
i guess i'd instantly die if i did
maybe we don't recognize
ourselves when we meet

BobBradshaw
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Re: no matter where i go there i am

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 05 Jul 2021, 06:34

Very clever... lol at times...terrific concept... my only suggestion... trim a tad bit in s4 & in s7 just keep the 1st 3 lines...

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Billy
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Re: no matter where i go there i am

#3 Post by Billy » 09 Jul 2021, 04:11

Thanks Bob, will probably revise per your suggestions since you are the master of this type of writing.

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