Summertime

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FranktheFrank
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Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Summertime

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 28 Jul 2021, 17:10

Summertime
Haiku

Planes box - firs - Scots pine
monkey's puzzle - coppered beech
Forests burn to ash

BobBradshaw
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Re: Summertime

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 28 Jul 2021, 19:24

Nice one, Frank

Michael (MV)
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Re: Summertime

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 28 Jul 2021, 23:06

Hi Frank,

my response with poetry:

a matchstick
reduces a wilderness
to ash 
 
 
 

BobBradshaw
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Re: Summertime

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 29 Jul 2021, 19:47

I like your lines, Michael, but the poem is Frank's.

FranktheFrank
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Re: Summertime

#5 Post by FranktheFrank » 29 Jul 2021, 23:14

Hi to my two old writing friends, thank you for your valued comments.

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