This Story Desperate To Live Again

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Billy
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This Story Desperate To Live Again

#1 Post by Billy » 12 Oct 2021, 02:24

This Story Desperate To Live Again

The ones I haven't heard
are the ones I want to hear.
The end doesn't end. Themes

are a simple kind of love.
Something will happen
to get there.

Memory isn't important.
You will remember
a thousand times

in different ways.
You will know the characters,
if I do my job,

as you know yourselves.
You've made the story smile.
You can go now.

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Re: This Story Desperate To Live Again

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 12 Oct 2021, 06:07

Oh, terrific work! LOVE that ending “You can go now.”
Love the entire poem.

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Re: This Story Desperate To Live Again

#3 Post by Billy » 15 Dec 2021, 01:06

Thanks Bob

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Re: This Story Desperate To Live Again

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 15 Dec 2021, 21:46

This is one of those rare poems that should be anthologized. Send it out immediately to an elite magazine.

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Re: This Story Desperate To Live Again

#5 Post by Billy » 16 Dec 2021, 04:11

Thanks Bob, I lack confidence. I write so many poor poems that I forget I can write a good one once in while.

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