"Roll back the tombstone"   (diptych for a poet born October 31, 1795)

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Michael (MV)
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"Roll back the tombstone"   (diptych for a poet born October 31, 1795)

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 07 Nov 2021, 08:32

 
I'll never live to see that beauty, that beauty, that same sad beauty again   -- S.Nicks lyric



                                  the taxidermied jack-o-lantern                                               I hear John Keats   
                                  a petrified pastoral

                                  a forever bright                                                                      my brother's voice
                                  orange, but artificial glow:

                                  Halloween cast                                                                      freed from the urn 
                                  a Grecian urn


 
 
 
 
 

BobBradshaw
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Re: "Roll back the tombstone"

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 07 Nov 2021, 20:40

Very nice. Especially that closing couplet.

Michael (MV)
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Re: "Roll back the tombstone"   (diptych for a poet born October 31, 1795)

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 08 Nov 2021, 23:53

 
Thanks, Bob,

I had hoped to post this on October 30th or 31st;

and maybe, if recommended/nominated, to agree to let it represent in the November IBPC.

But, too busy on the homefront; so it was the week late r

Today, I have refined the format, and an epigraph(superscript) has found its way to the poem.

8)

Michael (MV)

BobBradshaw wrote:
07 Nov 2021, 20:40
Very nice. Especially that closing couplet.

 
 
 

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