A TGIGF reflection

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Michael (MV)
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A TGIGF reflection

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 21 Apr 2022, 07:34

day breaks through
glass; the morning swelling:
“Crucify him”



the noon sun
getting framed in criss
crossed gothic panes



like the power went out -
all skylights
suddenly eclipsed



full moon,
and the howling windstorm --
a wolf stationed
at the foot of the cross



sunset deposition --
only the cross panes left
at the scene of the crime



pink moon
keeping vigil over
the man's cave



from wet caves
to massive graveyards -
now, for all, empty tombs
free from plots

FranktheFrank
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Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Re: A TGIGF reflection

#2 Post by FranktheFrank » 21 Apr 2022, 16:00

I am sure crisscrossed is one word, Michael.
It does little to have you use it like that.

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Billy
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Re: A TGIGF reflection

#3 Post by Billy » 21 Apr 2022, 22:01

These are all superb Michael

BobBradshaw
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Re: A TGIGF reflection

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 22 Apr 2022, 06:23

The pace is good. The poem builds up to the close really well. Good, solid work.

Kenneth2816
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Re: A TGIGF reflection

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 28 Apr 2022, 15:23

Some really great turns of phrase.

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