No Curtain Call

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FranktheFrank
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Location: Between the mountains and the sea

No Curtain Call

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 02 Jul 2022, 04:22

I hear your cough
You toss and turn
In the other room

Your face turns to me
Full on in its frame
In black and white

You shine with light
On the right side
Your hair draped

Like a curtain on the left
You glide on the ice
Of a flooded field

The most artistic
Athletic legs clad
In silk stockings

Dawn strikes the window
Blue black rays
I wait for your call.

BobBradshaw
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Re: No Curtain Call

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 02 Jul 2022, 22:15

A nom

capricorn
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Re: No Curtain Call

#3 Post by capricorn » 02 Jul 2022, 23:56

I like this one, Frank. Seconded.

Eira

capricorn
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Re: No Curtain Call

#4 Post by capricorn » 02 Jul 2022, 23:56

I like this one, Frank. Seconded.

Eira

RamanathanSiva
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Re: No Curtain Call

#5 Post by RamanathanSiva » 05 Jul 2022, 18:50

Yes, I second this.

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