Cyber World Two

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FranktheFrank
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Cyber World Two

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 15 Apr 2023, 03:54

A Diary Conceit

My IPS provider has severed
the cord of our connection
after being so fed-up with me
Our correspondence becoming
increasingly discordant
meaningless
worthless

My contractual misdemeanours
corrected - castigated by A1
that fails to understand
the frailties of human beings
To err is to be human

Cast adrift like Ben Gunn who longed
for just one morsel of Wensleydale
Now, how I miss that cyber world
That digital haven
With a reality of its own

I sail silently through cyberspace
searching for a new beginning
Like Voyager seeking
friendship from a distant kingdom
Set in deep and utter darkness

FranktheFrank
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Re: Cyber World Two

#2 Post by FranktheFrank » 16 Apr 2023, 13:51

Just touched up this very old poem.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Cyber World Two

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 18 Apr 2023, 00:08

I like the last 2 stanzas. I don’t know who Ben Gunn is, but I get the idea. Good close…


I sail silently through cyberspace
searching for a new beginning
Like Voyager seeking
friendship from a distant kingdom
Set in deep and utter darkness

FranktheFrank
Posts: 1983
Joined: 02 Mar 2016, 18:07
Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Re: Cyber World Two

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 18 Apr 2023, 01:02

Robert Louis Stephenson's' Treasure Island finds a castaway named Ben Gunn
his first words to the cabin boy, Jim Hawkins, were,
'You wouldn't have a bit of cheese now would you?'

BobBradshaw
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Re: Cyber World Two

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 19 Apr 2023, 01:00

Great quote!

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Billy
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Re: Cyber World Two

#6 Post by Billy » 28 Apr 2023, 17:56

This is humorous and current, Frank, I like it.

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